The Feelings of a Man
"'I love you,' he said.
It sounded too fake,
I knew he was lying,
That smirk on his face,
That glint in his eye,
He's just using her,
Can't she see,
The world is not all truth,
But is mixed with lies,
And conceives children with
hate and confusion,
But she believes him,
Even as he laughes,
And hits her,
She believes him,
And through all those restless
nights he never came home,
Not till very late,
She believed him and waited,
But one night he won't be able
to take it,
The love she gives him,
And he'll leave,
Leave the world,
All because of his guilt,
Only from those words,
'I love you.'" ended the note.
He left the house and commited suicide,
And his wife never understood why.
i wrote this 9/16/05 and i think it's my best poem yet so i hope you like it and even if you don't;
you better comment becuase i want to read your reactions so remember to comment!
my favorite song right now is by Fall Out Boy~Sugar We're Goin' Down Singin',
It's really the best so try to listen to it on the radio or somethin' and believe me you will not be angry after listening to it saying it was a waste of time and getting mad at me.
{if it does happen, though,.......you didn't hear it from me!;}
so how are you all, if you have to you can write a whole page of comments and talk about your life but it would be a waste- i mean you might as well get your own blog but after getting a blog-that doesn't mean you shouldn't visit my blog anymore, okay?
right so life is good/bad, boys are good/bad, and family is good/bad. [it changes every day or somethin' like that]
anyways remember to post. gotta study for a big test, hope you all have a wonderful day, keep livin' life to the fullest, and all that stuff, don't stop smilin', ya know all the rest(hopefully) and just remember me when your on the comp.
so see ya later.
5 Comments:
meet me at my locker right after school and Scott will probably not be there, okay? and yes i did say you write a page of comments. and also.............I AM NOT A BEAST! i am a human being who writes wonderful poems if i do say so myself. anyways see you AFTER school.
5:34 PM
ok
so where were you?
not impressed by the poem
too blunt
6:23 PM
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6:23 PM
tell me about it.........blunt is not always a welcome thing-couldn't he have been a bit more sensitive to the fact that my poems have nothing to do with if its good or not but how i feel-but of course i've only been writing poems for FOUR YEARS........i mean seriously i don't care if it rhymes or not or is too "blunt" or not.......i just want to write how i feel and be happy.......its my outlet and not meant to be graded on...........you know what............if i don't want bad comments on poem i shouldn't post or show them to anyone at all..........so don't be expecting any more poems...........they're personal and they'll just stay that way.
5:07 PM
hey why you so mad?
don't you want me to be honest?
i just wrote what i felt like about your poem
i know poems are personal like mine are but i still showed you didn't i?
all of my poems doesnt rhyme too
poems doesnt have to rhyme its the content not the color
so keep writing...
9:12 PM
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